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A ride of a life time

"Ahhhhhh!!" I heard from the girls on the ride hoping that I would get on the ride soon. I've heard a lot that day about the "Excelorator" like, " Oh my god, that was so awesome I can't even stand straight." And "That ride shook me so hard that,that"he said right before he threw up in a bush. I thought to my self " wow there are 2 down sides to this. I can either not stand straight or I can throw up. I wanna take the not standing up straight for a while." I thought while laughing at myself.
So, I was sanding in line with my mom and she had her hands on my chest and I was so nervous she said," Loosen up your laces you are so tense!" The reason why I was like that was because the engineer was always messing with the countdown. For instance, 10...9...8...321 GO! I was so freaked out when I got to the front of the line because the roller coaster goes 82 miles per hour in 2.2 seconds. The person in front of us was on the ride and when he came back his hair was sticking up(he had long thick hair). So it was my turn and i praised when it was my turn, it took a 2 hour wait. I take a step in the read car with orange flames and took off any loose items. I took a deep breath and closed my eyes.....BOOM first you get a punch to the face with wind then going up a 20 story building then skydiving off of it then getting caught in a tornado. If you can do that then you are basically riding the Excelorator. I told my brother while we were in line for the ghost rider, as he was listening attentively and pleading for more.

Draft #2

"Ahhhhhh!!" I heard from the girls on the ride hoping that I would get on the ride soon. I've heard a lot that day about the "Excelorator" like, " Oh my god, that was soooo awesome I can't even stand straight." And "That ride shook me so hard that,that"he said right before he threw up in a bush. I thought to my self " wow there are 2 down sides to this. I can either not stand straight or I can throw up. I wanna take the not standing up straight for 200." I thought while laughing at myself. So, I was sanding in line with my mom and she had her hands on my chest and I was so nervous she said," Loosen up your laces you are so tense!" The reason why I was like that was because the engineer was always messing with the countdown. For instance, 10...9...8...321 GO! I was so creepped out when I got to the front of the line because the roller coaster goes 82 miles per hour in 2.2 seconds. The person in front of us was on the ride and when he came back his hair was sticking up(he had long thick hair). So it was my turn and i praised when it was my turn, it took a 2 hour wait. I take a step in the read car with orange flames and took off any loose items. I took a deep breath and closed my eyes.....BOOM first you get a punch to the face with wind then going up a 20 story building then skydiving off of it then getting caught in a tornado. If you can do that then you are basically riding the Excelorator.I told me brother while we were in line for the style="font-weight:bold;">

Postings #2

Normal: At first I was getting in the car for Knott's Berry Farm, then the next thing I know is I'm in line for the most extreme 15 second ride in my life.

Setting the mood: I take a big deep breath and smell the fresh clean cloud-free air and take a step forward in line at, The EXCELORATOR.

Amamonapia: "AHHHHHHHH!!!", I heard from the girls on the ride hoping that would happen to me soon (less than 2 hours).

Rough Draft #1

The Excelorating Excelorator
At first I was getting in the car for Knott's Berry Farm, then the next thing I know is I'm in line for the most extreme 15 second ride in my life (So far). The "Excelorator" . I kept hearing from people say " It was the best thing ever!!!" or "It was so scary that I pooped my self." Well, I continuously thought, "Wow it would either scare me or it will be better than the most I have been on(Journey to Atlantis). So, I was in line with my mom and she had her hands on my chest (I was really nervous) and she told me,"Jeez losen up your laces. You are so tense." The reason why I was so nervous was because the rollercoaster engiener alwaysed messed with the count down, for insatance, 10...9...8...321!!! So when I got to the front of the line I was creeped out because i heared that the goes 82 miles per hour in 2.2 seconds.The person in front of us was on the ride and when he came back his hair was sticking up(and he had really long and thick hair). So it was finally my turn (it took a 2 hour wait) I take a step in the car (thats what the rollercoaster cart looks like)and took off my shoes my braclet necklace and any other loose items. I took many deep breaths and closed my eyes. The next thing I know is Boom you feel your getting the biggest punch of wind right in your face then going up a 20 story buliding (high speed) then jumping off of it and getting caught in a tornado. If you can do that then basicly you are riding the Excelaorator.
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